Where's My Jetpack?: LOLSUITS No. 2

Tuesday, June 23, 2009

"His store's open!" exclaims cubicle dweller #2.

"That's why I hired him!" responds grey-haired boss.

By Teenie, at June 23, 2009 at 3:41 PM
Don’t take this the wrong way, but there’s something about this series that isn’t quite working yet. However, I’m sure you’ll get there eventually. I definitely think it’s a brilliant idea. But for some reason, it doesn’t have the twists that your other series have (the cold-call dude, the 50s office meeting shot, even the headline band names). Wish I had some good direction or advice. Again, I think you’ll get there. Maybe the copy needs to be more stupid like LOLCats. I don’t know. Sorry.

By HighJive, at June 25, 2009 at 1:44 AM
Don't be sorry hj. It's weak and about to be shelved

By RFB, at June 25, 2009 at 7:47 AM
no, i honestly don't think it should be shelved. like i said, there is a brilliant idea at the core.

i keep going back to some of your other series. maybe it's the contrast of the old visuals with the cynical modern copy. i don't know.

but this series seems just a step away from having the perfect hook. maybe it does involve being truer to ripping off lolcats, with the misspellings and big type. or maybe it's about inserting the real-life bullshit business remarks you and i hear daily and putting them against the stupid visual.

again, i don't know what the answer is yet. but this idea is a good one.

later.

By HighJive, at June 25, 2009 at 6:13 PM